Wednesday, February 23, 2011

Creative Writing

Alberto- Chilean Couple-Poem-Lessons Learned

You have shown me something

I have been privileged

You are struggling to get by

I thought I would get a taste of the hard life

I have not

Everywhere I have gone

People have been hospitable

And shown me kindness

Who has been kind to you?

You have starved

You have been in prison

And for what?

For having a different belief?

For wanting a better life?

I thought this journey would give me experience

That it would show me the hard life

It hasn't

But you have.

You have lived the hard life.


3 comments:

  1. I like how you point out that Alberto is already privileged, and yet people give him hospitality, often for free. On the other hand, the Chilean couple is poor and nobody helps them out. Even though I don't think Communism is right, it is true that they should not be imprisoned just for having different beliefs.

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  2. This is very good. I like the idea of Alberto noticing their struggle. Everyone is struggling in some way. Alberto and Ernesto are strugglng on their journey, but the fact that you have Alberto notice the Chilean couples struggle as well as his own brings more depth to the character. Good job!

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  3. This poem brief,which gave a great impact. We don't really get to read about how Alberto feels and thinks about specific things in Ernesto's diary. But this was fascinating to read:)

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